Hawk's Pokemon Adventures in the Sinnoh Region Chapter 9

Chapter 9: Seperate Ways

Hawk: Woah calm down bro.

Chris: CALM DOWN?!

Hawk: Yeah......

Chris: HOW THE F*CK CAN I CALM DOWN?

Hawk: Just take a pillow and....

Chris: NO I MEAN HOW THE F*CK CAN I CALM DOWN WHEN I LOSE EVERY SINGLE F*CKING BATTLE I TRY OUT!

Hawk: Don't worry your a good trainer.

Chris: YOUR JUST SAYING THAT!

Hawk: No I'm not I really mean it.

Chris: YEAH RIGHT! THATS WHY YOU KEEP KICKING MY @$$ IN BATTLES!

Hawk: No its not like that!

Chris: SHUTUP!

Hawk: Actually, you shutup Mr. Flippy Pants.

Chris: You did not just call me that........

Hawk: I did.

Chris: F*CK YOU!

Hawk: ........

Chris: I'm so sick and tired of you Hawk!

Hawk: What did I ever do?

Chris: Ever since we started this journey you have been so annoying. Always beating me in battles, and all that.

Hawk: I'm the one who tried to save you from Bobby Jackson!

Chris: I DIDN'T NEED YOUR F*CKING HELP BACK THERE.

Hawk: Calm down!

Chris: NO!

Hawk: ....

Chris: Then, you were to lazy to swim away from shore to get away form that Sharpedo.

Hawk: But did you help me? No! It was Kingler.

Chris: Screw your Kingler!

Kingler emerged from its Pokeball.

Kingler: King ler! (F*ck you!)

Chris kicked Kingler.

Hawk: WTF!

Hawk returned Kingler.

Hawk: Why would you kick my Kingler?

Chris: Cuz its stupid.

Hawk: MY POKEMON ARE NOT STUPID!

Chris: Of course there stupid

Hawk: grrrrrr.....

Chris: ..... Your not a Pokemon, you can't use Growl.

Hawk: GRRRRR!!!!!

Chris's attack fell.

Chris: WTF! AUTHOR YOUR RETARDED!

Author: Leave me out of this.

Hawk: ........

Chris: I fell like leaving you Hawk, and going on the journey by myself.

Hawk: Why?!

Chris: It would be so peaceful.

Hawk: Well acually, I think that would be a good idea. Maybe we can go our seperate ways!

Chris: Fine with me.

Hawk: I found you annoying too.

Chris: How?

Hawk: Always complaining about how much you suck, not bothering too help me out, always battling people and never giving me a chance.

Chris: Not uh!

Hawk: Yeah. I remember when we were gonna battle Alex but you wanted too do it and wouldn't let me even though you suck!

Chris: I DO NOT SUCK!

Hawk: Yes you do

Chris: Well if you really feel like that, then GOODBYE!

Hawk: Bye!

Chris went on up the Route. Hawk went back to the Pokemon Center.

Hawk: Tommorow, I will start my real journey, by myself!

Nurse Joy: Want the free room?

Hawk: Hell no those beds suck. I'll take the $100 Pokedollar room (this money I stole from Chris will come in handy.)

Nurse Joy: Ok, have a good night sleep.

Meanwhile......

Chris: Yes I'll buy the Ultra Ball..... WAIT! WHERES MY MONEY!

in the game pokeballs are $200

Oh. My. God. What the hell did I just read nine chapters of? This is... like... reading a bad comedy. The jokes are AWFUL and the breaking of the fourth wall is ANNOYING AS HELL. The storyline... wait, what storyline? THERE'S NO POINT TO THIS STORY! It's just a jumbled up abomination of ASSNESS. F*ck man, what did I read? I think my eyes are burning from the awful randomness of this "story". This is just... bad. Rowan is WAY out of character -______- This story is just bad.
Rating so far: 3.5 out of 10

jd896 wrote:

Oh. My. God. What the hell did I just read nine chapters of? This is... like... reading a bad comedy. The jokes are AWFUL and the breaking of the fourth wall is ANNOYING AS HELL. The storyline... wait, what storyline? THERE'S NO POINT TO THIS STORY! It's just a jumbled up abomination of ASSNESS. F*ck man, what did I read? I think my eyes are burning from the awful randomness of this "story". This is just... bad. Rowan is WAY out of character -______- This story is just bad.
Rating so far: 3.5 out of 10

your a jerk to my grandson

Uh huh, I'm POSITIVE he's your grandson *sarcasm*

I'm stating my opinion. The plot is AWFUL, I don't even know what's going on half the time, and overall, it's a bad story. Enough said.

Whats wrong with the plot? Its clear where this is going. Btw that is my grandma.

It's clear where it's going? All I know is that "Hawk" and "Chris" are in the Sinnoh League. Read my other post for the full critique.

jd896 wrote:

It's clear where it's going? All I know is that "Hawk" and "Chris" are in the Sinnoh League. Read my other post for the full critique.

There not in the Sinnoh Leauge yet they just started there journey! You probably didn't even read. Its clear how they get there starters. I guess the storyline could be a little better cuz they have been in Sandgem Town for the past 7 chapters.

*sigh* Well the journey's supposed to be about it and yes, you need to get away from Sandgem lol

I was keeping them there until Chris lost enough to flip out.

Could've moved to another town... <_<

I gues syour right, but its gonna get better now. Now the main story begins, HAWK'S adventure (without chris)

i give this whole adventure a 4 out of 5

Explain your rating.

D00ms wrote:

i give this whole adventure a 4 out of 5

Thank you

No one's seen a real fan fic besides mine, have they? -____-

jd896 wrote:

No one's seen a real fan fic besides mine, have they? -____-

Well this place isn't for profesional's so if your gona criticise, gtfo of my chapters.

Criticism is for all stories. It makes a person write better. And I never stated "professional". Stop twisting my words around.

Well your tyring to say mine is not a good fanfic, well its not profesional so thats obvious.

I never said it was professional. I am entitled to saying it's not good though, because in MY OPINION, it isn't. Case closed.

Ok fine. My story will get better though.

i thought this was a good chapter, especially when hawk growled Chris' Attack fell

....haha people atacks....=O CRIMINAL!... why would he need an ultra ball now?

Idk I just randomly put Ultra Ball.